Wow, it’s amazing how much easier it is to read without all the read squiggles. And as I got further into the piece, I appreciated RH’s comments more and more – it’s a good lesson – when you are going over the critique of a partner, make sure you have two versions – their comments, and a cleaner one to help you really evaluate them. I made more changes…and this is going in the Final Rough Draft Vault. Hope you like it! Next week, we’re going to shift gears and approach this like we might be sending it out as a proposal to agents and editors. I’m going to start with showing you how to put a synopsis together, using what I call the “Plotting Roadmap.” Then I’ll show […]
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Chapter 3.2 SMW comments to RH edits
Okay – it’s been such a long time since we had the last scene, there are a lot of varying opinions in this followup scene. Rachel and I do dialogue very differently…so, you’ll see my rebuttals (and I kept most of the original because it flowed with the previous scene better). But it is good to remember that clarity, flow and characterization are the key elements in delivering dialogue. One thing i really appreciate however is another eye — her comments really make me thing about craft, and whether I agree, or not. Unfortunately, the text may be hard to read, to check back tomorrow for the cleaned up version! RH COMMENTS IN CAPS OR BOLD Chapter 3.2….RH comments with SMW rebuttal Luke didn’t know who to strangle first […]
Read the RestChapter 3.2 – Luke’s POV!
Chapter 3.2….rough draft – here we go! Luke didn’t know who to strangle first – the blonde who looked like she could level him with one straight on glare in his direction or Greg, the cousin who just couldn’t seem to leave him alone. “I was just trying to help,” Mackenzie said. “I just hate the fact that they think they can rule the world.” “It really wasn’t any of your business, MaKen –Miss Grace.” “It’s Kenzie. And…I know.” She sighed, looked away. “Reporters just…get under my skin. A job hazard, I guess.” A job hazard. Luke glanced at her wrist brace. Something had happened, enough for her even now to put a protective hand over it. He had to admit, he hadn’t the faintest idea who […]
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