Chapter 3.2….rough draft – here we go! Luke didn’t know who to strangle first – the blonde who looked like she could level him with one straight on glare in his direction or Greg, the cousin who just couldn’t seem to leave him alone. “I was just trying to help,” Mackenzie said. “I just hate the fact that they think they can rule the world.” “It really wasn’t any of your business, MaKen –Miss Grace.” “It’s Kenzie. And…I know.” She sighed, looked away. “Reporters just…get under my skin. A job hazard, I guess.” A job hazard. Luke glanced at her wrist brace. Something had happened, enough for her even now to put a protective hand over it. He had to admit, he hadn’t the faintest idea who […]
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Finished RD – Ch 2.2 Luke POV
So, although I think I still need to add more storyworld – 5 senses and mood to this scene, I’m going to put it in the bank, and keep going, making a note to self to add that in when I get a chance. (’cause the book ain’t finished until we say it is!) Here’s the final so far! Fate knew how to make a man suffer. It wasn’t enough that Luke had sacrificed his pride nearly sprinting out of the nursing home. Or that he’d managed to get his mug in the paper, again, after rescuing his rascal-of-a-nephew from traffic. But now, fate wanted him to replay his past, everything he’d spent the past five years hiding from. Couldn’t the world just leave him alone? Luke stood […]
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RH comments highlighted in grey SMW comments highlighted in yellow Changes highlighted in blue Ch 2.2 – Luke’s pov Fate knew how to make a man suffer. It wasn’t enough that Luke had sacrificed his pride nearly sprinting out of the nursing home. Or that he’d managed to get his mug in the paper, again, after rescuing his rascal-of-a-nephew from traffic. But now, fate RH: who is it? Who wants him to replay his past? A bit more detail? wanted him to replay his past, everything he’d spent the past five years hiding from. Couldn’t the world just leave him alone? (Apparently not.) RH: Suggest deleting this. The previous sentence sets it up for the reader well. Luke stood at the window, cupping his (DELETE: microwaved,) […]
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So, here we have it, the rough draft of Luke Alexander’s scene. Poor Luke has a dark, riddled past, which we’ll uncover as we go along. But he’s also a hero, so although he is very uncomfortable with being around his deteriorating father, I wanted to also show that he is the kind of guy who will do the right think when needed. Since the inciting incident of the story has already begun with MacKenzie, I wanted to spend more time on normal world with Luke, show the kind of person he is. His journey will start when MacKenzie happens upon the scene. Here are the SHARP elements of the HOOK I started with: (for a class on these elements, go to the My Book Therapy shop and download I […]
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