Sorry it’s taken so long to get chapter 3.1. out!! I taught at a retreat last weekend, but after a grueling week of prep, I finally had a chance to brainstorm out and write the rough draft of this first scene of chapter 1. I wanted to make Kenzie a bit more sympathetic, as well as raise more questions about Luke. Also, I wanted to raise another story thread that I’ll pick up later – the one that said that Luke might have secrets – and that someone might be out to get him. I also took a few ideas from the Voices (thank you!) about raising the issue of having the reporter recognize him. Thoughts? Suggestions? Post them in the Voices Forum, Chapter 3 discussion! Chapter 3.1 Of course, […]
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Chapter 3.1 rough draft
Sorry it’s taken so long to get chapter 3.1. out!! I taught at a retreat last weekend, but after a grueling week of prep, I finally had a chance to brainstorm out and write the rough draft of this first scene of chapter 3. I wanted to make Kenzie a bit more sympathetic, as well as raise more questions about Luke. Also, I wanted to raise another story thread that I’ll pick up later – the one that said that Luke might have secrets – and that someone might be out to get him. I also took a few ideas from the Voices (thank you!) about raising the issue of having the reporter recognize him. Thoughts? Suggestions? Post them in the Voices Forum, Chapter 3 discussion! Chapter 3.1 […]
Read the RestFinished RD – Ch 2.2 Luke POV
So, although I think I still need to add more storyworld – 5 senses and mood to this scene, I’m going to put it in the bank, and keep going, making a note to self to add that in when I get a chance. (’cause the book ain’t finished until we say it is!) Here’s the final so far! Fate knew how to make a man suffer. It wasn’t enough that Luke had sacrificed his pride nearly sprinting out of the nursing home. Or that he’d managed to get his mug in the paper, again, after rescuing his rascal-of-a-nephew from traffic. But now, fate wanted him to replay his past, everything he’d spent the past five years hiding from. Couldn’t the world just leave him alone? Luke stood […]
Read the RestChapter 2.2, Luke’s POV, RH suggestions with SMW comments!
RH comments highlighted in grey SMW comments highlighted in yellow Changes highlighted in blue Ch 2.2 – Luke’s pov Fate knew how to make a man suffer. It wasn’t enough that Luke had sacrificed his pride nearly sprinting out of the nursing home. Or that he’d managed to get his mug in the paper, again, after rescuing his rascal-of-a-nephew from traffic. But now, fate RH: who is it? Who wants him to replay his past? A bit more detail? wanted him to replay his past, everything he’d spent the past five years hiding from. Couldn’t the world just leave him alone? (Apparently not.) RH: Suggest deleting this. The previous sentence sets it up for the reader well. Luke stood at the window, cupping his (DELETE: microwaved,) […]
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