As usual, RH did a superb job of going through this – not only catching some deep POV fixes, but also some structural issues to do with her filmmaking, etc. Note the discussion about using senses to create a picture of the emotion the POV character is feeling, also. It so helps to have another set of eyes, doesn’t it? Note too, there were a couple suggestions RH made that I may incorporate into the next draft, as I clean it up. Then I’ll hand it to SK, and let the polisher at it! RH comments highlighted in green, SMW comments highlighted in yellow, and new changes in RED. As always – if you have any questions, head over to VOICES! Chapter 2.1 Rough Draft B “It just feels like running […]
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Chapter 2.1 Rough Draft – Mackenzie’s POV
Here it is – chapter 2.1 – MacKenzie’s POV! Thank you to the VOICES for all their direction and input over the weekend! Now it’s time for comments, questions and suggestions – go to VOICES – Chapter 2 discussion and add yours to the story! *** “It just feels like running to me, Greg, and the truth is…I never run.” MacKenzie got up and walked to the railing of his rooftop porch, overlooking Manhattan Beach. Greg didn’t exactly have a sandy front yard, but from three stories up on his Mediterranean style home, she could see the ocean climbing up the store, reaching past the last gilded rays of the day into the shadows of twilight. Palm trees, and volleyball nets along the shore shivered in the wind, and […]
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Here it is – the final rough draft of chapter 1.2. (I am sure you are tired of reading it by now!) Note, I’ve made a few more changes (especially after reading more of the VOICES comments and reviewing SKD’s edit notes again!) Now comes the hard work. We have to write chapter 2! So, what considerations go into writing chapter 2? First – we’ll probably open back in Mackenzie’s pov. We want to catch up with her and figure what happens next. How do we do that? First, we know it is a REACTION scene – because she had a strong ACTION scene in the first chapter. Which means we have to figure out her current DILEMMA, as raised in the last chapter. Then, we determine […]
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