So, although I think I still need to add more storyworld – 5 senses and mood to this scene, I’m going to put it in the bank, and keep going, making a note to self to add that in when I get a chance. (’cause the book ain’t finished until we say it is!) Here’s the final so far! Fate knew how to make a man suffer. It wasn’t enough that Luke had sacrificed his pride nearly sprinting out of the nursing home. Or that he’d managed to get his mug in the paper, again, after rescuing his rascal-of-a-nephew from traffic. But now, fate wanted him to replay his past, everything he’d spent the past five years hiding from. Couldn’t the world just leave him alone? Luke stood […]
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Chapter 2.2, Luke’s POV, RH suggestions with SMW comments!
RH comments highlighted in grey SMW comments highlighted in yellow Changes highlighted in blue Ch 2.2 – Luke’s pov Fate knew how to make a man suffer. It wasn’t enough that Luke had sacrificed his pride nearly sprinting out of the nursing home. Or that he’d managed to get his mug in the paper, again, after rescuing his rascal-of-a-nephew from traffic. But now, fate RH: who is it? Who wants him to replay his past? A bit more detail? wanted him to replay his past, everything he’d spent the past five years hiding from. Couldn’t the world just leave him alone? (Apparently not.) RH: Suggest deleting this. The previous sentence sets it up for the reader well. Luke stood at the window, cupping his (DELETE: microwaved,) […]
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I’ll bet you’re wondering – what happened to Blog-A-Book? (Heretofore referred to as BAB). No, it didn’t die. It simply took a hiatus while I finished a different book, and went to teach at a conference, and while Rachel also worked on a book…. but we’re Baaaack! With the next installment of the story. So – here it is, go post your questions and suggests and comments at http://www.mybooktherapy.ning.com/ Chapter 2 discussion! As I wrote this, I tried to find a scene where we could put Luke and Kenzie together, and I wanted a case of mistaken identity. Also, I wanted to introduce the idea that meeting a famous woman might be an issue for Luke. Might try and work that in more as I go. Also, wanted […]
Read the RestChapter 2: Line Edits by SKD
Oh, this is good stuff by Susan! One of the things she wanted me to mention is, like with all editors, authors have feedback on all suggestions – because that is what they are, suggestions. But, as evidenced by this edit, Editors really know what they are doing, and it has to be something I feel strongly about if I am going to disagree. Great job on this piece, SK! I’m going to accept changes, make a few more tweaks and it’ll go in the hopper! Chapter 2.1 Rough Draft C with SKD line edits. “It just feels like running to me, Greg, and the truth is…I never run.” [SKD: I had to read this sentence over a couple of times before it sank in that she wasn’t […]
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